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"By DECREE OF OUR MOST HOLY PROPHETS YOU HAVE BEEN SENTENCED TO DEATH!! ANY LAST WORDS OF REPENTANCE OR WILL YOU BEG FOR MERCY?" The Spartan stared on blankfaced. "Very well then Major assume firing line" The general had fought these demons all around Reach for the past week and they showed no signs of giving up. After a day and a half planet time of sending hundreds of Sangheilli to their death he finally captured the monster who killed so many of his brothers. Only to find that it was a human, a female no less. Instead of killing her right on the spot he chose to make an example of her before the other prisoners and the rest of the fleet gathered around Reach. As the Major steps up along with his squad she takes a moment to look around her then she yells REEEAACCH! and breaks her bonds through sheer strength. The two Zealots flanking her try to grab her but she pulls the energy sword free from one and attacks the other. The squad is about to fire but the general calls them off wanting to see this fight while activating his cloaking.
       She clashes with the Zealot and both seem evenly matched but days of fighting with no food or water left her weak and take it's toll as she slowly falls back. The Zealot pushes her back and presses with an overhead slash but doesn't compensate for a Spartans speed and she dodges slicing his back and destroying his overshields. He roars and charges her but she falls onto her back making him fall onto her and kicks him a meter with both legs. He gets up with encouragement from his brothers while the Spartan stumbles up with a cut on her shoulder. She can see the prisoners cheering her on and feel a chance, just a chance, that she might escape into the bowels of the ship and save them all from death. The Zealot approaches and with one final effort they clash but instead of locking blades she ducks flipping the Zealot over and stabbing it with his own blade. Silence. Then a blade slashes through her chest and sees the general appear "FIRE" "But my lord--" "I SAID FIRE DAMMIT" she drags the handle closer and grabs his energy dagger and stabs him. Both fall to the ground. The Spartan rises to her knees and looks at the other prisoners and smiles as the clicks and whining of weaponry prepare to fire. The Major gives the order "Fire".
     . . . . . .she never spoke. a search through her file showed she had never spoken since she was kidnapped. She only ever said that one word. Reach. It was her birthplace, her boot camp, her home. She never spoke again just smiled. Not when the planet was glasses not when her home burned, not when her fellow Spartans died. Not when they gave the order. Not a word. The silence in the room was deafening. . . . .
I made this on a whim and found inspiration from my sister and a game of Halo Reach we played. One of the few times we actually had fun together. Please go easy on me this is my first story ever and I've still gotta get the hang of it.

I do not own halo I do not own anything except this story.
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CptWRogers Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2014
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Did I miss anything?
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jacobmosovich Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
It's not master chief if that's what your thinking it's a female Spartan I based off my sister's Spartan
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CptWRogers Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2014
I'm jk
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jacobmosovich Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I'm a noob what's jk mean again
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CptWRogers Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2014
joking.
Also can you add me on steam dude?
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jacobmosovich Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I don't know how I'm freaking out it's not like deviantart at all.
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CptWRogers Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2014
steamcommunity.com/id/cptroger…
Use this link.
Use it to add me with steam, or use addfriend and find my account.
look up turorials if needed
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dathore Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
great story man, really interesting and gotta say the silent spartan thing was pretty cool
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jacobmosovich Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Thank you I've got alot of story ideas but I never get to them I feel horribly lazy and like I'm a procrastinator.
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dathore Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
the best way to beat lazines is to move around, go out, walk around, you know just avoid staying on the same place for too long and after a while youll be able to write anything you want, i did that while drawing my thunder sprite and it worked like a charm :D
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jacobmosovich Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I think that counts as procrastination lol
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dathore Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
to be fair i dont remember what procrastation means xD
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jacobmosovich Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Facepalms" procrastination to put something off for late derrr
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dathore Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
lol, well cant expect me to know all the dictionary :D (specially since english is my 2nd lenguaje xD)
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jacobmosovich Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
What's your first language brekin zie deutsch┐
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xheraldxofxhopex Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2014
*sniffle* how sad...
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jacobmosovich Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Thank you your the only one so far that hasn't complained about what needs to be fixed and just enjoyed the story.
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xheraldxofxhopex Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2014
they're simply offering advice, no big deal. but i get it... if everyone critiqued my poetry i wouldnt be the most optimistic person either.
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jacobmosovich Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I know I updated it with more paragraphs.
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xheraldxofxhopex Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2014
coolness
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KittySib Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2014
Interesting story! A little vague or confusing at a couple places, but it's a good start:)
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jacobmosovich Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Thanks that means alot.
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KittySib Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2014
You're welcome:D
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MuddyTiger Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014  Student Digital Artist
Critiquing this I would say, (sorry if I seem rude or harsh), but PLEASE use paragraphs and better sentence structure.:cries: I'm lost as to what's going on in this story because it's hard to follow what's going on, and who's doing what and where.:shrug: 

I mean, after I understood what was going on, it's a nice short story; I really like the fight, but please rewrite this, and be sure to break it up into paragraphs. Having only one, huge wall of words is a good way to get the readers to loose interest in having to read it and to loose track of where they are or to what's going on, as I have gotten lost several times when reading. You know what I mean?^^;

It's a great story and I'm interested in reading a little more on what happens next. I like not truly knowing if the Spartan dies or makes an escape somehow. That'll be cool if she does and that last Elite that she stabs is still alive, too.:evillaugh: Revenge is nigh!!

So keep up the story, just make sure that you have someone pre-read it first, ok?:iconthumbsupplz::icongrin--plz:
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jacobmosovich Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
There I fixed it with paragraphs I probably should have fixed a few reunions but I'm lazy in the mornings.
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jacobmosovich Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Okay like I said this is my first story ever. The Spartan was supposed to be noble six but I changed my mind and left it as Spartan she does like many of the Spartans of reach she just goes out a with a bang.
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MuddyTiger Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2014  Student Digital Artist
I understand that this is your first story, and I'm glad that you're not throwing a fit like what most first-timers do.:pat:
OH! Noble 6, that makes since now.^^; And yes, going out with a big bang is the only way for a spartan to go.:salute::bomb:
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jacobmosovich Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Danke that's cause Ima nice I ain't no barbarian jus a redneck.
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